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15 Responses to Published

  1. Maria says:

    Love this poem. Very evocative language.

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  2. Ralph says:

    Wow ! This is one for the Keeper Files. You did it this time, you’ve touched a deep down spot.
    Thanks for the Journey !

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  3. claudiachapline says:

    Yes!

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  4. Me like very much 🙂

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  5. sirenaross says:

    Feels like science and magic had a fight, killed one another, and the funeral was pretty but depressing. I love this.

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  6. vivachange77 says:

    Your imagery engages me. Lovely.

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  7. HemmingPlay says:

    Reblogged this on HemmingPlay and commented:
    the phrase “sun fed children” caught me, and then I fell in love with the rest of this one. Enjoy.

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  8. Those photos are haunting. . . they really add to the tone of the poem.

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  9. othermary says:

    Great extended metaphor. And I agree with thestoryofblue about the photos…they are quite disconcerting – in a good way.

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  10. “The wilderness is young
    Encircled by highways
    And wormy blue rivers”

    Lovely! I was just scrolling through your blog, barely scanning, but had to stop and reread this piece.

    There’s a couple words used multiple times that you could probably replace with something more interesting, (dirt; circled/encircled; likeness; young), to sound more earthy and natural. Some of the word choice feels generic..but otherwise, I don’t have a critique 🙂

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