A brilliant poem.
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Powerful, expressive and evocative. Most telling line:
‘This night is full of last breaths.’ 👍🏽
This is a hauntingly beautiful poem, one to ponder on for days.
Wow, this poem is amazing, so moving and the blogger about is right, one to think about… thank you. Michelle
really nice visceral poem. agree with the line ‘this night is full of last breaths’ being a winner.
You’ve expressed this in ways no op-ed piece or talking head could dream of touching. Brilliant.
Thanks so much, Susan.
Very nice! (And btw: I love the art you choose to go along with your words.)
The images you convey with your words are just so real – the depth of feeling, your feelings, really translate. Just brilliant 🙂
Very evocative and disturbing at the same time, and touching to find some grace amid turmoil.
Is this from experience, or feelings?
Either way, well done Elan.
I would have to say it comes from both experience and feelings.
This piece took me back to when I used to live in Washington, D.C. ..not uncommon to hear shooting at night…you captured that feeling of fear and the shortness of breath and life beautifully…nice job
Very thought provoking and relatable.
Words woven wonderfully… nice post!
Evocative, provocative, brilliant. I love the lines
“Does breathing know things…
I don’t know? …. Like…
Being scared, being prepared.”
If we allowed ourselves, subconsciously we would know the right actions.
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This is wonderful, well done! I love how you explore the connection between breathing and so many others things – two people, the present, the future.
This poem hurts in the best way.
Oh my, you have some wonderful poetry, Elan. I’d like to follow you to learn more about the craft from you.
By all means. Thanks
Wow, once again powerful commentary on life in America in the 21st Century, how sad for us and even sadder for the victims and their families.
HI Elan, I’ve nominated you for Premio Dardos Award. Cheers! (https://icareucareblog.wordpress.com/2015/08/15/blessing-12-premio-dardos-award/)
Thank you, but I must decline.
Sure, no problem. The choice is yours 🙂 Have a good day!
Exquisitely meaningful poetry. It felt like it jut flowed from your heart.
Yes, all lives matter and we see them drift away in so many different ways.
Powerful, beautiful words about the simplest and most essential things. It is heartbreaking and heartwarming at the same time.
Your words are simply riveting.
I wish I could write this beautifully..!! Mesmerizing ❤
Thanks so much!
Poignant words that portray so much! Wow!
Besides touching the guts of us all, these words might find a wall in many Trauma Centers and ER’s . ….Proud…..
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This photo is familiar; is it Irish Archives? Some of those old black and whit shots make great jumping off points. This is a great poem.
I believe these are Chicago cops from the 1920s.
I wrote a poem about bankers from an Australian Archive photo. I’ll post it on Poetikat Unbound. It’s just a fun one–with bite.
I don’t use photos as prompts, if that’s what you mean. After the poem is finished, I go and search for an image.
I like this.
It’s as if the words acquire life in your poetry.
Using your own title, I’m tempted to add, in your art, ‘All Words Matter.’
For, each silent space between the words feels like a breath spent in worthy reflection.
Exactly! That was very deep. 👌
Very well-expressed. A beautiful and powerful piece!
WOW, and I was just outside listening to crickets and stars breathe before I came in and read this. Great poem.
filled with emotions……
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