This is different. I got a bit lost, wandering through metaphorical uprights, but it is at least, unique and unpredictable. The line Sex becomes scoring really threw me. I had taken this to be a more religious poem–the war between the Sunday philosophies of church and the start of football season. Perhaps it is more about all the things that lead one away from the path of righteousness?
It’s not that black and white. But, sex does enter the realm of religion or should I say religion enters the realm of sex. This is a poem about culture. If you will excuse me, there is no such thing as righteousness. As soon as you say that, you are forever attempting to stretch your weekend.
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Interesting simile/metaphor/imaging. I like that idea.
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Loved this part—For some syntactic commentator
Who plays with verb’s balls
Scores with nouns,
Penalizes with adverbs,
Kicks extra pointy adjectives
Through the uprights,
Glad I decided to follow you…look forward to more!
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Love the planet of hurdles and sugary cheerleaders. Some delicious word combinations.
Amazing use of Metaphor! Beautiful piece
What a telling commentary on American society.
Marvelously clever words to describe “weekends in our lungs”. This is a great mixture of commercialism and human nature.
Excellent poem. And….is that a panda in the photo?? 🙂
Yes, the panda is the goal keeper.
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Thank you Elan :). Always look forward to reading your poems…such a treat.
Ahh, thanks so much!
One of my all time favorites!
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