Looking Through Me


It’s too bad I can’t kiss his lips.

I’m not attracted to them.

But, if I were, he would reject me.

For my stories are buried deep

And they cannot be read easily

It is as if, I shouldn’t exist.

You see…

The problem with being buried deep

Under the frosty top, is that I see

The mist for what it truly is

He edits the mist.

He looks for countries caught

In eternal Octobers, Stories about

Leaves and lives, the constant state of fall

It is the arc of the descent he catches

Like holding on to a match for too long.

If I were to put my hand upon his chest

He would jerk away from

the coldness of my fingertips

I have stuffed my heat deep

Sometimes, I can’t even feel warm.

My tears aren’t made of kerosene

I’ve been to the ocean too many times

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37 Responses to Looking Through Me

  1. Elizabeth Helmich says:

    This is haunting and brilliant. Love the metaphors you chose, such emotion conveyed.

    Liked by 4 people

    • sueashby7 says:

      I find this so amazingly rich with imagery and emotion. You are truly inspirational, the way you make every word count. I will be looking forward to reading many more.

      Liked by 2 people

  2. BeeHappee says:

    So beautiful, Elan.


  3. wgr56 says:

    You’re an awesome talent, Elan. You should be getting paid to write.


  4. pranabaxom says:

    Beautiful and quite deep.


  5. Love this. My husband is another of those who “edits the mist,” although I’d never before thought of it with that phrasing. Thanks!


  6. deuxiemepeau says:

    Bravo- I’m standing up clapping- bravo


  7. Sophie vdA says:

    You should attend The Poetry International Festival in Rotterdam upcoming june! This kind of poetry is new, modern, thoughtfull and really fits for the festival! Take a look at: http://www.poetryinternationalweb.net/pi/site/home/dynamic

    Greetings by Sophie


  8. shooplor says:

    Deep. Keep it up 🙂


  9. maria says:

    Beautiful! And these lines… ❤
    "The problem with being buried deep
    Under the frosty top, is that I see
    The mist for what it truly is"


  10. lexirose7350 says:

    i love how you use metaphors in your writings…. interesting!!!


  11. lexirose7350 says:

    is it correct to say words/phrases were euphemistically used?


  12. Carl Ebdon says:

    Very thought provoking, well done. Everyone interprets poems differently and the way I interpret yours is probably totally different to the meaning you intended, however if the words make a mark on a reader then your job is done. I especially liked the lines
    ‘For my stories are buried deep
    And they cannot be read easily’

    Thank you for sharing your work.


  13. When I read your poem I thought wow, she’s an awesome talent. Then as an advocate for women and founder of real women real talk live I thought, i would love to discuss this poem wuth you on my show. Is this your story? Are you available to chat? RWRTLive@gmail.com. Hope to hear from you. Beautiful poem.



  14. ditsy99 says:

    Such a wonderfully written piece.
    Great read!


  15. vivachange77 says:

    You image your rock-bottom sense of reality that sees the mist for what it is in beautiful poetry. Lovely paradox.


  16. tkeverlywrites says:

    This was so beautifully evocative, Elan. Thank you.


  17. cote8050 says:

    Truly lovey… wow… Michelle


  18. sserrat says:

    The whole thing I like. I enjoy its tune, but I must confess I fell in love with certain sentences


  19. Sonia says:

    Something in this poem moved me deeply.


  20. This piece speaks sentimental things


  21. I loved this post. Beautiful. Profound.
    Here’s hoping you’ll check out my blog too. 🙂


  22. The Empress says:

    Sweet and poignant. Makes me miss writing my own poetry.


  23. Your work is beautiful and thought-provoking! Thanks for connecting with me!

    Liked by 1 person

  24. Deepak Singh says:

    This is amazing, and at the same time, the only true path. Thanks for the visit and follow.


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