Smidgens
In hot summer
With night sky exposed
We sit with backs to the planet
Searching for satellites.
Those stars that move
Ploughing the heavens
In strict straight lines……..and then
Once found, followed, observed, concluded in
A celebration of our simple control
Of a sky so close
That it shapes our visions
Even when the atmosphere
Stirs up dirt or is measured
Carefully for precipitation.
We hold hands for the first time
And it feels like they fit together
Our eyes darting from sky to eyes
Different colors, different light,
To each star, a name, a distance
In this moment of movement
The ground is warmer
Cotton blend flat upon turf
Don’t kiss me yet
“With night sky exposed, we sit with backs to the planet” – so elegant and subtly surreal. This makes me visualise illustrations from The Little Prince.
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Will do. Thanks for sharing your experience with the women you help.
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This is startlingly beautiful. Made my day. Thank you for sharing this. I am glad I came across your blog. Can’t wait to go through your body of work. Keep posting. Thanks
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Reblogged this on wwwpalfitness.
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So many things to commend this. “Ploughing the heavens” is a gorgeous line. Thank you for sharing this piece.
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Thanks so much!
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https://messytittles.wordpress.com/2016/07/20/a-liebster-award-thing/
I nominate you to the Liebster Award.
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That would be one appropriate ending. Thanks
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Let us just have this moment
Undefined
Without ending.
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Everything that has to happen, happens in these moments of movement. Thanks for sharing.
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i enjoyed reading this, a lovely summer poem about skies and holding hands. i, too like the last line. there are many ways it could be interpreted.
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Reblogged this on Still Another Writer's Blog.
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Love this
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I love reading this–it’s like a veil of summer. I would love to paint it some time. That may sound unusual; but I can see this poem represented by a certain palette! And it’s lovely.
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Beautiful!!
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excellent. multisensory, flitting, and intent.
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I absolutely love this!
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LOL. I like your story.
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I like this poem. It reminds me of the time I dated a guy in high school for less than a week, but we took a night walk, held hands, and watched the stars. As we lay there looking up, heturned to me in what could have been a sweet teenage romance of a moment and kissed the side of my boob (bra and shirt on). Then he said,”I had to do that”. Strange encounter. I should have said, “don’t kiss me yet”.
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Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem with us!
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Wow – fantastic poem! Twist at end full of all sorts of energy (and possibilities).
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Thanks. It needed something to tie it all together while “stilling” (stealing) the moment, which leaves something untied or yet to be tied.
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I love the end of the poem, so unexpected and so very real. Thanks.
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That was so delicate yet riveting. Makes me want a summer love 😉
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Ethereal, summery, beautiful.
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