Yes, that particular line changed a few times from non-abstract to abstract, back and forth and back and forth, but I felt the final version’s visual, emotional, and rhythmic strength would overcome its abstractness, delivering meanings to the reader. Thanks Joan
Love this, Elan: “Between sheets of sea… we carve coolness into the shape of ocean waves.” So abstract and yet, the picture you paint in my mind is so clear. The photo is intriguing also, looks like a stadium full of rocks… some on the 50-yard line, others in the nosebleed seats. 🙂
wonderful poem!
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“Rattles the skeleton city” I like that alot.
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I just love it a very intriguing rhythm to the words and I’ve never heard air conditioning explained so creativity
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Dynamic poem. I love the photo’s evolving as I scroll down.
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Lovely words ❤️
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Both the picture and the write-up compliment so well. Loved this piece 🙂
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Yes, that particular line changed a few times from non-abstract to abstract, back and forth and back and forth, but I felt the final version’s visual, emotional, and rhythmic strength would overcome its abstractness, delivering meanings to the reader. Thanks Joan
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Very imaginative poem with amazing imagery, Elan!
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Love this, Elan: “Between sheets of sea… we carve coolness into the shape of ocean waves.” So abstract and yet, the picture you paint in my mind is so clear. The photo is intriguing also, looks like a stadium full of rocks… some on the 50-yard line, others in the nosebleed seats. 🙂
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This is wonderful. Both the photograph as well as the poem. Thanks for sharing.
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Fantastic imagery, I love it!
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Lovely words; intriguing photo. Very nice!
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Wow, very cool! Thanks.
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