Elan Mudrow
Smidgens
Tlaloc Speaks to his Lover.
It’s raining.
“This is a warm rain, an uncommon rain. It feels too nice and the sidewalks don’t like it. It gets into their cracks, swelling, expanding, like my blood feels when a warm drop hits my arm.”
“Your eyes look so worried when you tell me things like that.”
“They do? I don’t think I’m worried, but I am at the same time. I can’t help feeling like I’m two rhythms, pounding together. Each drumbeat telling me a story. I can hear two clearly. Fuck, maybe more.”
The rain becomes a light drizzle.
“Another story just started. You must think I’m weird.”
“Sure, I like it.”
“I’m weirder than that. I don’t feel anything, just everything. Or I don’t feel everything, just anything. Does that make sense?”
“Yes, kind of. I understand what you mean.”
The rain stops. Only drips are heard, falling off gutters and tree limbs.
“It’s so humid. That’s not normal for around here. And it’s changing for good. There’s nothing we can do about it—it’s like those stories, those drumbeats. I can’t seem to find an end to them. I want them to end, but I don’t.”
“You can try. That’s what you’ve always done. Don’t worry, it’ll work out.”
“They keep my interest, but somehow they seem to be waiting for something. Look how fast the steam is rising from the streets. You know, I think we’re like the steam. First, we’re like rain touching the street, then we move on.”
The sun pokes its heat out from behind a cloud.
“Sometimes I want to touch you like no one has ever touched you before, but I only have these hands and they’re like everyone else’s.”
“I like the way you touch me.”
“Are my hands warm? I know I can be cold sometimes. There are different ways to touch.”
A couple of heavy raindrops fall unevenly from the sky. As if another downpour is about to occur.
“Is all rain alike? I swear each raindrop hits the ground differently. I notice stuff like that. It’s soothing to me to listen to each storm, how they are so different from one another. Do you think it might be true, that each raindrop creates a new life?”
“I don’t know. If you say so, then, I guess it could be like that.”
“The rhythms increase when I don’t hear the rain. It’s like dry voices chattering away, not making sense. I can make one or two of them out, for a while, then I write them down. Then, I come back to read them. It’s gibberish, all just a bunch of gibberish.”
The clouds part creating large stretches of blue sky.
“The rain is always stopping. Can I touch you now? I need to know.”
“Will it help?”
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Wonderful chatter.I smiled throughout. you & yrs. Have a holiday, gray
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Wonderful poetry the rain creates.
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Despite the stilted beat, this piece has the strangest rhythm to it. There’s something off-beat; hypnotic, almost. Something intimate, but completely detached at the same time. I can’t put my finger on it, but I swear it took my breath away.
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Ohhhh I really like this!!
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Lol. I totally understand. It gives me the same feelings too.
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Elan, this is incredible. It feels right and true and real. I have no idea why I’m connecting so much to this, but it’s wonderful, and confusing, and a little bit scary. I feel… Understood. Is that silly? (Thank you for writing this!)
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Thanks. I couldn’t have asked for a better review.
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I don’t know how to describe it, but this felt wonderful.
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Wow that was beautiful!!
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